8/1 The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

8/1 The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.
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The line graph illustrates how many
people
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are visiting the
museum
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in
UK
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and how they were influenced by the time and
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the seasons in 2005.
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, it can be clearly seen that most
of
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the
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people
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choose the warm season to
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the
museum
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instead
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of winter. During the summer, most of the
people
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choose to visit the
museum
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at 11 o'
clock
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, around 1300
people
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, but the highest level on
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can be seen at 12 o'
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, when the number of
people
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is over 1400, with a decline for the next hours. Moving forward, the least
people
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can be seen at 16:00 until 18:00, where the number of
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starts from 800 and goes down by the
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hour, to 0. In the winter time, 10 o'
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is the hour that
people
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start to visit the
museum
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, but the most crowded hours are 11 and 12 o'
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, starting from approximately 400 visitors, to around 600 next hour. From 12 am to 3 pm, the number of visitors is going down, only 200 peoples at 14:00 and 0 at 15:00. The most crowded hours is 12:00 o'
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for both seasons, but during the summer we can still see
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in the
museum
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until approximately 5:30 pm, when during the winter, at 3 pm the
museum
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is already empty.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum, clock with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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