The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.
The bar charts explain the data in per cent of British humans paying cash to
the
charity Correct article usage
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organisation
Fix the agreement mistake
organisations
depend
on their ages Wrong verb form
depending
between
a period of two decades, which is from 1990 up to 2010.In overview, Change preposition
over
from
the age of 18 to 65 Correct pronoun usage
those from
years
plus
, were those who received money from Britain.Correct word choice
apply
Hence
, it is also
represented in percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
on
that time.
Change preposition
of
To begin
with, those who were aged 18-25 earned the least capital for
about 18% in 1990 Change preposition
apply
as well as
approximately 6% in the year 2010 repectively
.Correct your spelling
respectively
Furthermore
, population
at 26 Add an article
the population
a population
years
old awarded
with around 32 per cent whilst the others at 35 being experienced a maximum of 35% from England.
Add a missing verb
was awarded
Moreover
, in 1990, human beings aged 36 reached the highest percentage of about forty-two and
followed by members who were at 65 which Correct word choice
apply
they
encountered an Correct pronoun usage
apply
estimate
Replace the word
estimated
of
39% of capital amount.Change preposition
apply
Lastly
, both 50 years
as well as
65 years
plus had same
range in 2010 of 35% of Correct article usage
the same
money
from helpers in the UK.Add an article
the money
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