The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.
The bar charts explain the data in per cent of British humans paying cash to
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charity
organisation
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organisations
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depend
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on their ages
between
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a period of two decades, which is from 1990 up to 2010.In overview,
from
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those from
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the age of 18 to 65
years
plus
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, were those who received money from Britain.
Hence
, it is
also
represented in
percentage
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the percentage
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on
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that time.
To begin
with, those who were aged 18-25 earned the least capital
for
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about 18% in 1990
as well as
approximately 6% in the year 2010
repectively
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respectively
.
Furthermore
,
population
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at 26
years
old
awarded
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with around 32 per cent whilst the others at 35 being experienced a maximum of 35% from England.
Moreover
, in 1990, human beings aged 36 reached the highest percentage of about forty-two
and
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followed by members who were at 65 which
they
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encountered an
estimate
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of
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39% of capital amount.
Lastly
, both 50
years
as well as
65
years
plus had
same
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range in 2010 of 35% of
money
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the money
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from helpers in the UK.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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