The chart shows the changes that took place in the different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

The chart shows the changes that took place in the different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.
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The given line chart illustrates three types of different crimes including
burglary
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, car theft and robbery
took
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that took
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place
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between 2003-2012
as well as
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changes in the
crime
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in the Newport city
center
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centre
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. The horizontal line describes
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number
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a number
the number
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of
incidents
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and
vertical
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the vertical
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line shows various years.
Overall
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,
incidents
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of
burglary
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took
place
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the most in 2003 and
at the end
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of 10 years it comes to second highest.
Burglary
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and car theft
incidents
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fluctuated the most compared to robbery.
To begin
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with , in the year 2003
burglary
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incidents
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took
place
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the most as less than 3500
incidents
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. Afterwards,
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this
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these
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crimes
rises
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rose
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in
number
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in 2004 and
then
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it dropped after that year to 2008 as only more than 1000
incidents
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.
Further
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,
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number
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the number
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of
burglary
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incidents
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increased and decreased and in 2012 it came to less than 1500
incidents
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.
Following
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this
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, robbery is the least committed
crime
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. In 2003, there were more than 500
incidents
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and
then
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the graph
rises
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rose
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and dropped
down
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apply
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between 500 to 1000
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number of
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apply
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incidents
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and
at the end
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of
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the decade
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decade
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decade,
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the
number
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of
incidents
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is
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was
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still
same
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the same
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as
2003
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in 2003
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.
Lastly
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, car theft
crime
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started
as
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with
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less than 3000
incidents
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and after fluctuating a lot
this
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crimes
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crime
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became the highest committed
crime
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in 2012 as more than 2500
incidents
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took
place
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, place, crime, number, incidents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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