The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
The given map diagrams taken into account at West
illustrates
some changes that haveChange the verb form
illustrate
Add a missing verb
been
park
secondary Capitalize word
Park
school
since Capitalize word
School
it's
construction Correct your spelling
its
in1950
.
Correct your spelling
in 1950
Overall
, in the span of 60 years
only the main road Add a comma
years,
remain
at Change the verb form
remains
same
position, Add an article
the same
while
other places are moved and some new buildings are constructed.
To begin
with , the main road unchanged
Add a missing verb
was unchanged
as well as
also
remained in same
Change the article
the same
place
throughout 60 years. In 1950, there used to be numerous houses and a school
just downside the main road and just downside then
there was a place
for farmland and playground . But , in 1980 , a car parking area
and science block was
built Change the verb form
were
replacing
the homes and the Change the verb form
to replace
school
remain
in Wrong verb form
remained
same
Change the article
the same
place
although
it became the main building . The farmland was swapped by the sport
field , Change the noun form
sports
while
playground
remained unchanged.
Correct article usage
the playground
Lastly
, in 2014 , the science block and the school
are
still in Wrong verb form
were
same
Change the article
the same
place
, whereas
the car parking area
become
Wrong verb form
became
large
compared to 1980 . The car park Correct word choice
larger
area
extended
and the previous sports field Add a missing verb
was extended
area
became parking for cars in 2010 . Hence
, the players
Change to a genitive case
player's
players'
area
also
became small compared to 1980 , because one - third
of its part was used in constructing sports Correct your spelling
one-third
field
.Fix the agreement mistake
fields
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