The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
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illustrates
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some changes that have
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been
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taken into account at West
park
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Park
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secondary
school
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School
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since
it's
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its
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construction
in1950
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in 1950
.
Overall
, in the span of 60
years
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only the main road
remain
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at
same
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position,
while
other places are moved and some new buildings are constructed.
To begin
with , the main road
unchanged
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as well as
also
remained in
same
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place
throughout 60 years. In 1950, there used to be numerous houses and a
school
just downside the main road and just downside
then
there was a
place
for farmland and playground . But , in 1980 , a car parking
area
and science block
was
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built
replacing
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the homes and the
school
remain
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in
same
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place
although
it became the main building . The farmland was swapped by the
sport
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field ,
while
playground
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the playground
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remained unchanged.
Lastly
, in 2014 , the science block and the
school
are
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still in
same
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place
,
whereas
the car parking
area
become
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became
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large
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larger
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compared to 1980 . The car park
area
extended
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and the previous sports field
area
became parking for cars in 2010 .
Hence
, the
players
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player's
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area
also
became small compared to 1980 , because
one - third
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one-third
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of its part was used in constructing sports
field
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fields
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, place, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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