Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have a huge negative effect on both society and individuals. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In
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recent years social media has invaded the lifestyle of many
people
, It has its
advantage
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and
disavantages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
.
However
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the majority think that it brought more harm than good, especially
Facebook
. In
this
essay, both sides will be explored before evaluating whether the benefits
outweighs
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the drawbacks. On the one hand,
Facebook
is a reliable form of communication
accross
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across
the globe. With
this
era of
people
relocating to different parts of the world, social networking sites have played a
mojor
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major
role in reconnecting
people
to their roots. To elaborate,
i
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moved to Europe in search of greener pastures and life here is not the same as life back
home
in Africa, but every time when
i
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miss
home
i
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I
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go on
Facebook
and reconnect with my
people
at
home
. We talk,
share
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videos and photos online and it is these moments that
makes
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me catch up with what is happening there and
i
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feel like
i
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am at
home
.
On the other hand
, we have seen
people
abusing these social media sites and it has
cause
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a lot of suffering to many folks. Some have lost lives
due to
cyber bullying
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, others
lose
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money
due to
their accounts being hacked by imposters.
For
instance
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a certain woman committed suicide after her bitter ex-boyfriend posted her nudes on
Facebook
as a way to revenge their break up. In another
case
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an imposter
send
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a
messege
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message
with a website link to someone pretending to be a
freind
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friend
asking him to follow. Little did he know,
this
link was created to still his passcodes to his online banking details and
thats
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how he lost his fortune. In conclusion,
Facebook
and other social networking sites are not good for the community, they are doing more damage than good. They now act as a platform for criminals and they are causing untold suffering among the
people
.
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