The graph shows the change in average salaries across various spheres of employment in the US over a period of 40 years.
The presented line graph depicts
infomation
regarding the the wage of workers from several sectors Correct your spelling
information
such
as Engineering, IT and Professional Sports
over four decades (from 1970 to 2010). The given feature shows that IT has displayed the most prominent rise in salaries
over the whole period, in contrast
, the salaries
in professional sports
have witnessed the sharpest decline than the other areas. However
, the Engineering field remained constant throughout the given years.
Besides
being the lowest amount from the other salaries
, Engineering
field has experienced a slight change from around 55.000 to 70.000 during the whole Correct article usage
the Engineering
years
, which led to its figure Fix the agreement mistake
year
remained
the same. Despite facing a fluctuation Wrong verb form
remaining
number
over the whole period, Professional Sports
has the highest number
than
the other two sectors at 110.000 in 2010 and reached its peak of 145.000 in 2000. Change preposition
of
However
, the number
dropped of
a quarter to reach 110.000 afterwards.
Change preposition
by
In contrast
, salaries
in Correct article usage
the IT
IT
sphere Correct article usage
the IT
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
has
the most significant Correct subject-verb agreement
have
number
in salary increase from its lowest amount of 35.000 in 1970 to 100.000 in 2010, Wrong verb form
leading
led
to the second position under Wrong verb form
leading
Correct article usage
apply
the
Professional Correct article usage
apply
Sports
. Interestingly, IT gained the same increasing number
with Professional sports
of 20.000 in different years (Professional Capitalize word
Sports
Sports
in 2000 while
IT experienced it in the next one
decade).Correct pronoun usage
apply
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