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'Many people lost their jobs as a result of the COVID -19 pandemic' What can the government or individuals do to slve the problem?

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Many people lost their jobs
as a result
 of the
COVID -19
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COVID-19
 pandemic'.
This
 assertion is true following the
corona
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coronavirus
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 years. The outbreak of the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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 in 2020 sent shock waves across the world. From
north
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the north
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 of the globe to the south and east to west. Never has there been a time when things came to a
stand-still
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standstill
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 like during that period. Even the
super powers
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superpowers
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 around the world could not help though many efforts were carried out by different nations. The World Health Organization gave several recommendations and
guildlines
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guidelines
 to handle the situation yet many nations could not handle the situation because of the rapid spread of the virus. Various
government
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governments
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 attempted what was best for their countries but it was
uncontrolable
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uncontrollable
 until things
starting
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 improving as the weather
was
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changed during the warm seasons. During that period, educational institutions and many other institutions were brought to a standstill. What was beneficial was that home studies
was
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were
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 introduced into schools using different apps like
zoom
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, teams among others.
This
 is one of the measures introduced by the government to solve some of the problems.
While others
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Others
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 include wearing masks around at the
jobsides
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job sites
,
using
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and using
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 disinfectant at all public places and at private homes. Many jobs were lost
due to
 the situation, the government encouraged small businesses that collapsed during the
corona
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coronavirus
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 period. More people were encouraged to go to school.
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Task Achievement
To enhance task achievement, ensure your response directly addresses the prompt. Focus on clearly outlining what the government or individuals can do to solve the job loss problem caused by the COVID-19 pandemic. Consider including more specific solutions or policies that could potentially address the issue effectively.
Coherence & Cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, structure your essay more clearly by using distinct paragraphs for different ideas. Begin with an introduction that presents the topic and your main argument, followed by several body paragraphs each focusing on a specific point or solution, and conclude with a summary of your ideas and their implications. Transitions between paragraphs can help guide the reader through your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support your main points with more detailed examples and evidence. For each solution you propose, consider including statistics, studies, or specific examples that demonstrate its effectiveness. This strengthens your argument and makes your essay more persuasive.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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