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The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the rate of natality in
China
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 and the United States of America from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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although
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 the birth level in the USA is higher than in
China
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, both countries have negative trends.
To begin
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 with, the growth of newborn babies in
China
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 reached 10 in 1920, it was a slight gap under the USA's point and rose in the next five years until fell in 1930.
However
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, the natality level in
China
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 had some larger values in 1935 and 1950, which accounted for 15 and 20 which was the highest value during the eight decades.
In addition
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, the babies in
China
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 remained stable between 1940 and 1945, whilst the USAs' birth rates went to the bottom approximately at 5 in 1945.
Furthermore
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, there was a significant decline in newborn babies in
China
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 from 1935 to the next five years and in America five years after that,
then
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 those reached the peak in 1950.
In contrast
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, both countries diminished in the next decades until
China
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 had the lowest rank, which was under 5.

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