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You are going to visit the town where your friend went to university. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • explain why you will be visiting the town • give details of where you will be staying • ask your friend to recommend some evening entertainment.

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Dear Rahul, It's been a long time since we met. How's your new job? I think you must be missing your university and Kingston as that was the best time of your student life. I am visiting Kingston
this
 weekend for a corporate meeting with some of my co-workers. Surprisingly, my company has arranged my stay for 2 days in a
hotel
 near your university. Do you remember the Pacifica
Hotel
? You always used to show me that
hotel
 in our calls and we decided to visit
this
hotel
atleast
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at least
 once. I am eagerly waiting to visit
this
hotel
 and city both with you as we had plans
since
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long ago. The meeting is only 2 hours long and I am in Kingston for two days so I'm looking for some places to visit in the evening and I'm sure you have good choices. Can you suggest some
your
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 favourite places to hang out? Can't wait to see you. Your friend, Tirth
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Add more specifics about why you are visiting the town beyond the corporate meeting, if there's any personal excitement or anticipation to explore specific parts of the town, to better address the task prompt.
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Consider including more details about your planned stay like how you anticipate the experience at the Pacifica Hotel, to make your letter more engaging and personal.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly by separating information into distinct paragraphs with transitions. For instance, one paragraph can focus on your stay and excitement, while another discusses evening entertainment.
coherence cohesion
Connect your ideas using cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In addition', 'As for', etc., to ensure a smoother flow of information and ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to inform you that
  • I am excited to announce that
  • I have decided to visit the town where you went to university because
  • I have always been curious about the town, and I thought it would be a great opportunity to explore it
  • I have booked a room at a hotel called
  • I will be staying in the town from
  • I am wondering if you could recommend any
  • fun activities
  • entertainment options
  • popular places to visit
  • restaurants
  • bars
  • clubs
  • concert venues
  • I am particularly interested in
  • local live music performances
  • cultural events
  • art galleries
  • theater shows
  • I would greatly appreciate your suggestions
  • Thank you in advance for your help
  • I am looking forward to hearing from you
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