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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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Nowadays, the Internet is more and more
obquious
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obvious
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lifes
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lives
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, replacing several means of communication,
such
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 as television, radio and
newspapers
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. Among
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this
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these
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 types of press, maybe the
newspapers
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 are the most affected. I totally agree with
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statment
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statement
 and I will explain the reason in
this
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 essay. One of the
reason
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 why I believe that
newspapers
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 are becoming a thing of the past
,
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 is
due to
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 the fact that, in the current days, nobody or almost nobody
buy
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newspapers
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 from a shop. In the past,
for example
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, people used to sit
in
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on
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 a bench in the park to read the
last
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news
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by
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in
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 a
newspaper
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. Today, only elderly people do that.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that the big
newspaper
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companyes
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companies
 moved to online platforms,
oferring
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offering
 the same services, sometimes faster and cheaper than printed versions.
Additionally
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, other players like social media are broadcasting
information
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 much quicker than traditional media and fitted to specific niches. A good example
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the Facebook, Instagram and Twitter
that
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which
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 show
news
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 and
information
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 based on
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individuals'
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 profiles.
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, the
newspaper
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 only
show
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information
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 about the day before. People do not have more patience or time to wait for the
news
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 until the next day. When the printed version of a
newspaper
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 is ready, the
information
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 that it brings
are
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 old. In my own experience, I
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 to check the
news
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in
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on
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 my mobile phone or
in
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on
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 the Internet more than 4 times
in
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a day.
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, I really agree that
newspapers
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 are becoming an old-fashioned
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piece
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 of paper
as a result
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the
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incresed
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increased
 popularity of the Internet and social media
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structure
Make sure to provide a clear introduction and conclusion to outline your main arguments and your stance on the topic. This structure helps guide the reader through your essay.
support
Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. While you provided an overview, diving into more detailed examples or statistics could strengthen your argument.
grammar
Check your essay for spelling, grammar, and typographical errors to ensure clarity and professionalism.
cohesion
Use linking words and phrases (e.g., however, in contrast, furthermore) to connect your ideas more clearly and improve the flow of your essay.
depth
Expand your argument by considering counterpoints or other perspectives briefly. This can add depth to your essay.
task response
Revisit the prompt to ensure all parts are fully addressed. Make sure to explicitly state to what extent you agree or disagree with the statement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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