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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph indicates the amount of people going for a visit to a specific Caribbean island from the year 2010 to 2017.
Firstly
, a slight increase can be seen in the figure for visitors staying on
island
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the island
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 between 2010 to 2013, rising from 0.7
millions
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million
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 to 1.5
millions
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million
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. During the next four years, the amount remained
in
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at
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 1.5
millions
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million
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 except there
is
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was
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an
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apply
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only
decline
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a decline
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 in the year
of
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2016.
Moreover
, only 0.3
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
choosing
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chose
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 to stay on cruise ships in 2010,
while
this
 figure rose to 0.5
milliions
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million
millions
 in the next year.
Then
, from 2012 to 2017, the number of tourists staying on cruise ships increase constantly (from 0.3
millions
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million
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 to 2
millions
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million
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).
Overall
, the total number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island
keeps in
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kept
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an
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apply
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increasing trend during the period from 2010 to 2017 with the figure
boosts
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boosting
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 more than three times from 1 million to 3.5
millions
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million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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