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Band 4.5

Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have

Dear Sir or Madam, I have come to know that you are looking for an organizer
of
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 the
event
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 which
would
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 be held
on
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next month.
Its
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 an honor if
u
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you
 select me as the organizer of
such
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event
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an event
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. I know
this
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 is
very
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 important job
as well as
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responsibility
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a responsibility
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 but
i
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 assure you that I'll do my duties with great interest. I really admire
for
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you for
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 taking
such
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 a bold step to organizing
this
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 social
event
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,.
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,
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This
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 type of social
event
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 must be held
time
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 to time so that people connected socially and have some plate form to express their thoughts
with
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 each other. Please share with me
further
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 information regarding
this
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event
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. So that I could prepare myself
to
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this
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 job Let me share one more thing, that I already have
an
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apply
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experience
to
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in
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 organizing
such
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 type of
event
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.
Last
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 year an
event
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organized
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was organized
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 by a local NGO and I participated as an organizer of the program
me
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this
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 was a very fruitful experience for me. I learn a lot and feel more self-confident Hope you never let me down. Yours Faithfully, Kunwar

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General
Consider using a more formal tone and structure in your letter. Avoid using contractions (e.g., 'I'll') and informal language ('u' instead of 'you'). This will help create a more professional impression.
Task Achievement
Clearly state your interest in the role at the beginning of the letter and directly address each of the requirements laid out in the prompt: expressing your interest, requesting more information, and explaining your experience.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on developing a logical structure for your letter by organizing it into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea: introduction and expression of interest, request for more information, and explanation of your experience.
General
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct grammatical mistakes and improve sentence structure. This will help in making your letter clearer and more professional.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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