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the following tables show the average price of a Big Mac and a can of Coca-Cola (in US dollars) in five countries in 1990 and 2000

the following tables show the average price of a Big Mac and a can of Coca-Cola (in US dollars) in five countries in 1990 and 2000
The tables show the average
price
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 of a Big
Mac
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 and a can of
Coca-Cola
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 in US
dollars
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 in five different nations namely
Japan
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, China, Singapore, Indonesia, and Malaysia, from 1990 to 2000. By the large, the average
price
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 of a Big
Mac
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 was
downward
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a downward
the downward
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 trend with
the
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apply
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Japan
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had
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having
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 the highest
price
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 among these countries,
while
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 the average
price
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 of a can of
Coca-Cola
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 experienced an increase with
the
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apply
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Japan
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had
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having
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 the highest
price
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 too. Looking at the
detail
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details
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 of the average
price
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 of a Big
Mac
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,
Indonesian
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the Indonesian
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price
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 of a Big
Mac
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 in 2000 decreased
more
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by more
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 a half
than
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that
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 in 1990, from 2.50
dollars
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 to 1.50
dollars
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. Singapore saw a slight decline in the average
price
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 of a Big
Mac
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 from 2.90
dollars
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 in 1990 to 2.00
dollars
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 in 2000.
While
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Japan
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 and Malaysia’s
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price
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prices
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 declined slightly by 0.5
dollars
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 from 3.50
dollars
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 and 2.50
dollars
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 to 3.00
dollars
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 and 2.00
dollars
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, China’s
price
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 remained stable
in
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at
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 2.40
dollars
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. Turning to the average
price
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 of a can of
Coca-Cola
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, the
price
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 of a can of
Coca-Cola
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 in China in 2000 rose significantly from 0.50
dollars
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 in 1990 to 1.20
dollars
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 in 2000. Both Singapore and Malaysia had
same
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the same
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price
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 of a can of
Coca-Cola
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 in 1990
with
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at
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 0.75
dollars
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 and in 2000
with
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at
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 1.50
dollars
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.
Japan
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’s
price
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 experienced a rise in that
price
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 from 0.90
dollars
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 to 1.80
dollars
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. Meanwhile, Indonesia’s
price
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 rose slightly from 0.55
dollars
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 to 0.90
dollars
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 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, mac, coca-cola, dollars, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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