The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
The given two bar charts indicate information concerning device ownership as a ratio of
people
from 2002 to 2010 and another picture indicates by grade of education in the years 2002 and 2010. Looking at the
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that
computer
ownership gradually increased during the given period.
Moreover
, the
more high
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higher
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education
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the education
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level the
more
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higher
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the number of
computer
ownership in both given years. A cursory glance at the data reveals that between 2002 and 2010, the number of
people
have
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who have
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a
computer
steadily increased by less than 60% to approximately 80%.
In addition
, another eye-catching trend is that the ratio of
people
didn't
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who didn't
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have
high
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a high
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school
diploma
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diplomas
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shows
big
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a big
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difference in the
year
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years
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2002 and 2010 accounting for about 15% and 40%, respectively.
However
,
difference
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a difference
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of
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in
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computer
possession count between 2002 and 2010 became narrow when their education level
was
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apply
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rose. So,
people
who have a
postgrade
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postgrad
postgraduate
post grade
degree have over 10% difference.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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