The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
The given two bar charts indicate information concerning device ownership as a ratio of
people
from 2002 to 2010 and another picture indicates by grade of education in the years 2002 and 2010.
Looking at the overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that computer
ownership gradually increased during the given period. Moreover
, the more high
Correct word choice
higher
education
level the Correct article usage
the education
more
the number of Correct word choice
higher
computer
ownership in both given years.
A cursory glance at the data reveals that between 2002 and 2010, the number of people
have
a Correct pronoun usage
who have
computer
steadily increased by less than 60% to approximately 80%.
In addition
, another eye-catching trend is that the ratio of people
didn't
have Correct pronoun usage
who didn't
high
school Correct article usage
a high
diploma
shows Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
big
difference in the Add an article
a big
year
2002 and 2010 accounting for about 15% and 40%, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
years
However
, difference
Add an article
a difference
the difference
of
Change preposition
in
computer
possession count between 2002 and 2010 became narrow when their education level was
rose. So, Unnecessary verb
apply
people
who have a postgrade
degree have over 10% difference.Correct your spelling
postgrad
postgraduate
post grade
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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