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The most importaint aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The
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science
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 is one of the most important lenses of our world,
revolutionazing
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revolutionising
 the way we live our lives. It is believed to be the
upmost
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 priority of
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science
 should be to make
humanity
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 better in terms of living conditions and its future. It is my contention that
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numerous objectives listed on the agenda of the field of
science
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 to be implemented,
improvement
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the improvement
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 of people's
live
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lives
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 should be prioritized with the
upmost
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 significance. First and foremost, undoubtedly, it is almost impossible to envision the future of
humanity
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 in the event that
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science
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 is devoid.
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 is primarily
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 the life-altering inventions that
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 through
the
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scientific
researches
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research
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 and investigations. As we live on the edge of technology, making
humanity
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 a
multiplanetary
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multi-planetary
specie
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species
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 is considered the cornerstone achievement in history which has not been realized yet. It goes without saying that with the help of distinctive scientific subjects
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 as rocket engineering and material strength, a slow but determined step is taken each day, taking us one step closer to our end goal. To exemplify
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 statement, space companies like NASA and Space X invest billions of dollars into
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research and development activities to advance
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rocket technology and ultimately
one day
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one-day
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carrying
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humanity
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 to another planet and
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 it.
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, it is
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 worth noting that
science
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's footprint in the field of medicine and pharmacy is paramount,
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, modern scientists should put all their efforts
to find
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into finding
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 solutions to cure terminal illnesses. Unfortunately, there are a plentiful of diseases
still
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that still
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 remain unsolved and no curing method has been found yet.
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, scientists and doctors should combine their efforts and resources to
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fight off
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 cancer and save millions of people's
live
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lives
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everyday
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.
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,
instead
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 of selling drugs and medicine to the patients I believe, with the help of
science
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, a groundbreaking achievement can be accomplished in
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 sector. In conclusion,
science
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's footprint is crucial in our lives and the main aim should always be to improve the lives of humans.
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Address the prompt fully by discussing to what extent you agree or disagree with the statement. Include a more explicit position and reasoning throughout your essay.
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