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Some people think that exams are a good way of assessing a a student's level, Other people believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learners and tell us very ittle about their actual ability. Discuss both views and give your own opinior

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Some individuals believe that
examinations
 are a better method of analyzing a pupil's level
while
 others feel that they
give
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 extra pressure
to
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 youngsters and do not mark their real strengths. I believe that
exams
 pressurize
students
 unnecessarily without judging their real capabilities as it builds anxiety among young learners.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. There are many good reasons for having
exams
 to check a student's level. Most importantly, it gives an update to parents and teachers about the progress children have made throughout the academic period.
For instance
,
first term
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 exam results might help teachers
to
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prepare
the
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 next
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 lessons, keeping in mind the weak areas
students
 had previously.
Therefore
, we cannot completely ignore the benefits of
exams
.
However
, many people believe that
examinations
 cause extra pressure on pupils. Anxiety induced by
exams
 is
one
 of the major factors behind
this
 viewpoint. A very common example is that many brilliant
students
 who have been performing well throughout the year, fail to give an average result
due to
lack
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 of control over their nerves.
Thus
, a child's
knowledge
 should not be assessed fully by a single exam in a few hours.   Both views put forward valid points,
however
, I strongly believe that
examinations
 create extra pressure on
students
 and they cannot indicate actual
knowledge
 of an individual. Many children are getting excellent scores in continuous assessments in class but when it comes to final
exams
, they are quite anxious and completely forget what they have learned earlier. So, a student's
knowledge
 should be assessed by
day to day
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 performance rather than a
one day
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 final test. Summarizing the above discussion, there are two schools of
thoughts
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,
one
 favoring
exams
 and
other
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one
 rejecting them. I feel that
examinations
 are not a good tool to check
knowledge
 because
exam induced
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 anxiety creates
hindrance
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hindrances
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 to
showcase
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showcasing
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 a person's actual abilities.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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