The bar chart provides the information about how families in a countries spent weekly income in both 1968 and 2018

The bar chart provides the information about how families in a countries spent weekly income in both 1968 and 2018
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart provides the information about how families in a countries spent weekly income in both 1968 and 2018
The given bar graph indicates information concerning how families in nations expend their weekly income in the years 1968 and 2018. The data is measured by
food
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, housing, transport,
and
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apply
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etc. Looking at the
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that for the year 1968, members of
family
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the family
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spent their weekly income the most on
Food
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while
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,
in contrast
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in 2008, spent their wage the most on Leisure. A cursory glance at the data reveals that expenditure on
Food
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dramatically declined from 1968 and 2018 accounting for 35% and considerably more than 15%, respectively. As opposed to
Food
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, spent on Leisure sharply increased from below 10% to over 20%.
In addition
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, another eye-catching trend is that
spent
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spending
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on Household goods maintains the same level
consist
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consisting
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of nearly 10%.
Moreover
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, as indicated in the visual, in 2018, expenditures on housing and transport were higher
comparing
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compared
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with in 1968.
In contrast
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, Fuel, power, Clothing,
footware
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footwear
, and Personal goods expenditures in 1968 were higher than in the year 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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