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Band 5

You had borrowed a book from the public library however, when you reached home, you found that some important pages were torn away. Write a letter to the librarian explaining the situation. You should say: - Mention the book - Mention the pages - Suggest what can be done.

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. My full name is Nazarmatov Xojibek. When I was fifteen , I used to borrow
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book
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books
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your
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from your
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library
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 every week. Your
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library
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library is
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 popular with people and
the
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apply
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bigger than
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another library
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library
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 in our country. I borrowed
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book
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a book
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your
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library
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 yesterday .
This
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book
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about
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is about
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world war two
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World War Two
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. I have been
waiting
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waiting for
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this
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book
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since
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for
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 five months and I
achieve
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 it . Whenever I reached home, I opened the
book
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. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is when I looked
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book
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 some important pages were torn away
also
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 five pages were
sticked
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stuck
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. Torn pages were important for me because I have been training
from
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 history subject. It
for
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is for
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 the first time
this
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 problem for me so I am hoping you understand it. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem . I suggest that you bring me
other
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another book
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book
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 about
world war two
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World War Two
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. Yours faithfully, Zlatan

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logical structure
Ensure a clear structure for the letter: introduce the problem, provide specific details, and suggest a solution, each in separate paragraphs for clarity.
logical structure
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and range: frequent grammar mistakes can hinder coherence. Consider revisiting basic grammar rules and sentence structures.
logical structure
Use a more precise and varied vocabulary to more effectively express yourself, especially when describing the issue and suggesting solutions.
greeting and closing
Remember to include a proper closing and signature to your letters. While your ending was appropriately formal, ensure consistency in tone throughout.
complete response
Mention the specific pages that were torn to better achieve the task's requirements. Specific details can enhance the response's completeness.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a formal and respectful tone throughout the letter to align with the nature of the task. You managed this well, particularly in the greeting and closing sections.
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