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You recently bought an electric gadget for your home . your friend wants the same gadget and needs your advice .in this letter you should include: . what the gadget is .what you think about it .advice about other alternatives your friend could buy

#gadget #home #friend #advice #alternatives
Dear Manpreet, I hope you are living a healthy life.
Last
 year, I bought a Sony LED television from the '
AMAZON'
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Amazon
 site.
This
 is not only
75-inch
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 television but
also
 has a curved display.
Moreover
, in the beginning, we were relish with the quality of
this
 display, but after five months a single green vertical line showed on the screen.
Although
 we called
the
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customer Care to resolve
this
 problem, they did not respond and now seven months have passed but the problem of the green line is as it is. So, I suggest you to please do not purchase your LED TV of the same brand and try
to
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Samsung because they recently released a new model named SW301. It is
also
 75 inches
but
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long but
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 flat display with inbuilt Android software.
This
 is a good one in the present era. We will meet as soon as possible. Best regards, Harmanjot Singh
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Introduction
Make sure to start with a clear introduction that outlines what you will talk about in the letter. This will help set the context immediately for the reader.
Organization
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or points you are making. This improves readability and organization.
Task Achievement
For a stronger task response, explicitly mention the advice you're giving right at the beginning or in a separate paragraph to make your position clear.
Conclusion
Incorporate a brief conclusion to summarize your advice and add a personal touch, such as a wish or hope for your friend's satisfaction with their purchase.
Language
Try to use a variety of sentence structures to demonstrate language flexibility and keep the reader engaged.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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