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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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two tables illustrate information about
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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, It can be seen that the
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 of coffee in Switzerland accounted
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 highest amount of money in 1999.
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,
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sales
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bananas
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of bananas
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 in Switzerland
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 the highest which was 47
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millions
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of
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euros.
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, it was 1.5
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millions
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of
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euros in in 1999
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 it increased by 18.5
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millions
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 which accounted
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 biggest in 2004.
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, Sweden’s
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sales
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 of coffee
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 the lowest in given five countries which was 0.8
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millions
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. For bananas, It is shown that the
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 of Belguin
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 the
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 of
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 four countries which was 0,6 and
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 it rose by 3.4
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millions
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 in 2004.
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, It is obvious that those five countries’
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 all fluctuated in both 1999 and 2004.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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