The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
A quick glance at the tables
show
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information about how much money was
saled
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saved
by
coffee
and bananas in five European countries in 199 and 2004.
Overall
, there are twice as many
sales
in
the
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Fairtrade- labelled
coffee
in 2004 as
sales
in the
coffee
in 1999 and in Switzerland. In 1999, Switzerland was the superior contributor to
coffee
by earning three million euros, which was twofold and threefold of the UK and Belgium's achievements, respectively. In terms of Fairtrade-labelled bananas, in Switzerland, the number of
sales
in 2004 is three times higher than the number of
sales
in 1999, at 47
millions
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and 15
millions
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of
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euros respectively.
However
, Fairtrade-labelled
bananas’s
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bananas
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sales
had
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decreased in 2004, in Sweden and Denmark. With regards to describing Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
, in 2004,
coffee’s
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coffee
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sales
had increased in the given countries and the smallest
increased
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point was 0,2 in Denmark and Sweden but the highest
increased
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increase
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point was 18,5 in the UK.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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