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University education should be free for all students. Do you Agree disagree?

#university #education #students
In today’s society, post-school
education
 is an integral part of our lives, and it helps humankind to develop
further
. Some people believe that university
education
 should be accessible in terms of finance and free. I agree with the statement. In
this
 essay, I will explore various dimensions of the issue and provide an analysis of the statement to its extent.
Firstly
, there are some essential fundamental human rights
such
 as accommodation, healthcare, and all levels of school
education
.
Education
 improves our chances in life, and I believe it should be prioritized by the government and made freely regardless of socioeconomic background or age. On the ground that lower class
backgrounds
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students
 have a chance to lift their family status not only follow their dreams.
Moreover
, poorer
students
 have the motivation to study hard for better careers and life, which is good for universities,
also
.
Hence
, providing free
education
 for everyone is good
gor
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for
 individuals, their families and society.
Secondly
,
todays
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today
, universities
students
, suffer from financial pressures. If we add more pressure on them with a school fee, they have to get a part-time job which can lead to
exhausted
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 and high stress. In extreme
cases
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cases,
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 stress can
be trigger
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 mental illness and
most
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the most
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 severe case is suicide.
To conclude
, charging high fees for university
education
 creates inequality and contributes
high
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to high
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 stress levels for
students
. Providing free
education
 for all would create more equal opportunities and help to eliminate serious mental illness in our young
students
. I strongly agree
with
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apply
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the
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that
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 universities should be free
all
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for all
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students
 in order to
achive
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achieve
better
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a better
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 and happier society and individuals.
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