The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
The map shows two proposed locations for the restaurant in the centre of Paris. The boss
desire
to open a new restaurant in the field.
Correct subject-verb agreement
desires
Overall
, as we can see two potential locations which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
location
1 located in the north-western and location
2 near the Eiffel Tower.
To begin
with, location
1 there we can see a huge amount of variety to travel in the Change preposition
in location
cente
of Paris. It is close to Bir-Hakeim Bridge and the Maritime Museum with 8000 visitors per day. Correct your spelling
centre
This
very convenient place, cause, people can feel great sitting on
the park and Change preposition
in
breath
fresh air.
Replace the word
breathing
Secondly
, location
2 it
is shownCorrect pronoun usage
apply
a
perfect Change preposition
as a
location
near the Eiffel Tower with 16,000 visitors each day. It can lead to success and income for our restaurant and for his future. Which is located in south
part of Paris. People can enjoy Add an article
the south
with
Change preposition
apply
a
breathtaking Correct article usage
apply
view
and Fix the agreement mistake
views
also
went
to art Wrong verb form
go
gallery
to chill. Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
Moreover
, their
is Replace the word
there
sports
centre located in Correct article usage
a sports
south-western
and people can relax Correct article usage
the south-western
going
there and Change preposition
by going
spend
time with Wrong verb form
spending
your
friends.Correct pronoun usage
their
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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