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The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.

The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates the information regarding the
number
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direct
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foreign direct
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investment
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investments
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 for foreign in two countries
including
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India
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 and
China
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 between 2014 and 2019.
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, it can be seen that both
India
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 and
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China
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investment
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investments
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 experienced some fluctuations throughout the period.
All
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 of
years
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 except 2015,
China
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 predominated
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number
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a number
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 of foreign direct
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investment
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investments
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. Looking in more detail,
China
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 stood in 2014
to
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at
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 almost 80
dollars
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.
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, it was followed by a gradual drop in the next year.
Next,
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the
number
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 of
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investment
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investments
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 remained
to be
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relatively stable during
two
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the two
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 years. In these years, it
also
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 was witnessed that both
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china
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China
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 and
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india
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India
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 were in nearly similar
number
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 of
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investment
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investments
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,
although
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 there was a slight increase.
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, there was a slight fall in 2017 and a sharp growth in 2018.
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,
at the end
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 of
period
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,
china
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 dramatically declined
just
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 over 40
dollars
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. In the meantime,
India
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 began at over 20
dollars
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 at the beginning.
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there was a dramatic rise
2015
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in 2015
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 exactly to 60
dollars
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. From 2015 to 2016, The
investment
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 remained
to
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unchange
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unchanged
 relatively and had
similar
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a similar
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 position as
China
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.
Then
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, it dramatically declined in 2017. It
was
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witnessed
downward
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a downward
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 trend from 2018 to 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, investment, india, china, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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