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Band 2

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of better life but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in cities. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

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Thanks to some economic or social reasons many
people
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 want to live in city centers rather than living in rural areas.
Although
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 living in
magapolists
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megapolises
give
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gives
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 more opportunities to
people
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, there might be some drawbacks too.
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The Goverment
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Goverment
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Government
 should
do
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make
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 many good changes
such
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 as decreasing the price of
houses
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. Nowadays , so many
people
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 have found that cities are the best place to live.
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 there are many job facilities in city centers, most
people
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meet
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are
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unemployment
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unemployed
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. The demand for one job might be very competitive. Because of strong rivals , the
people
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 who have got
an average job skills
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average job skills
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 or experience , suffer from unemployment.
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, the government should introduce
the
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a
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 law about decreasing the price of
houses
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 . Because cost of the
houses
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are
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is
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 extremely expensive for
the
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apply
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people
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 who have got
low-income
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income
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.
For instance
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, in Russia ,
hundread
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hundred
hundreds
thousands
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of thousands
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 of
people
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 are given
such
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 type of
houses
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. In conclusion, one of the main
difficulty
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difficulties
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 for
people
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 who are migrating to big cities is unemployment.

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Task Achievement
Focus on wider coverage of the question prompts to fully address all aspects. This includes discussing various difficulties of city life beyond unemployment, and proposing multiple government measures for improvement, not limited to housing costs.
Task Achievement
Expand your answer to include more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points better. This completeness aids in achieving a comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance logical progression by planning your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs (each discussing a different point), and a conclusion. This structure helps in maintaining focus and organizing ideas effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Integrate a variety of linking words and phrases to ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs, thereby improving the flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your conclusion summarizes the essay well, ensure both the introduction and conclusion are more distinctly defined to effectively encapsulate your essay's thesis and final standpoint.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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