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There is a general increase in anti-social behaviours and a lack of respect for others. What are the causes and solutions?

#behaviours #lack #respect
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Nowadays more people tend to behave antisocially and there is a decline in
respect
 for other people. There could be several reasons for that. One of the causes of the current increase in anti-social behaviour might be rooted in the
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 technological development, which has resulted in the decline in personal communication and the rise of human-machine interaction.
Thus
, we tend to interact more with the software than with human beings resulting in more antisocial actions.
This
 problem might be solved by promoting the idea of interpersonal activities, communities and
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 clubs, which could encourage kinder and more amicable
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behaviour
. Another reason for the lack of
respect
 in everyday situations could be possibly
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the shortage of attention paid to the development of soft skills and emotional intelligence at schools. So, when graduates enter the
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 productivity-oriented work environment they find themselves lacking empathy and ethical
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, which not only hinders communication
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 but
also
 results in smaller productivity.
This
 can be solved early by implementing emotional intelligence classes in compulsory education at schools.
Finally
, the lack of mutual
respect
 can
also
 be rooted in the modern trend for assertiveness and brutality, which are oftentimes overestimated and promoted on social media. The cases of anti-social
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 have often been mistakenly shown as 'cool', which has led to more young people devaluating basic human virtues. The only possible solution to
this
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by the idea that kindness and
respect
 are foundations for
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 successful life and traits of a strong personality.
Overall
, the issue of anti-social behaviour and the lack of mutual
respect
 is quite acute,
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 there are a few solutions that could tackle it.
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