Many governments think that economics progress is there most important goal some people fieber think that other type of progress are equally important for a country discuss both views and give your opinion

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economic stability.
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governments believe that economic
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is one of the significant
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for a
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,
whereas
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other
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oppose and believe that there are many other leading aims
such
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as education, social connection,
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stability are all the major goals for a
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rather than
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the
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ecnomic
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expansion. In
this
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essay both notions are explicated with
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examples,
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in my assertion economically advancement in
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with all other facets of
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perspective of those who consider only economic
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is a profound goal of
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in
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. It would not be wrong to say
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all other aspects of a
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are based on the production and growth of economics. To
precise
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more
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, if a
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economically
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strong and balanced
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, it automatically leads to the improvement
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features in a region.
However
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, only the
development
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of
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safe and secure environment is not quite enough. It will not be a way to make the
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contented and happy. A
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in our own
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, peoples' who belong to underprivileged families
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not know about the
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economic situation, they only want some basic necessities of life. In these circumstances wherever
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lies
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goal
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, raising
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kind of cases emphasises
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the value of other
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of
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as education, health, construction of
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agriculture etc. On the other side,
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are completely right, the revolution in all other aspects of
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country
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rather
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economics
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stability is
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well concerned. In order that it is an obligation of
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rulars
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to play vital roles in these areas of
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country
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as well. In
this
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take
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steps in the other sectors e.g. health, education, prosperity and
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of inhabitants it will be more lucarative
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in
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country
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. Even though with the assistance of
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government
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will be able to make
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country
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economically more
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.
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will pay taxes to the
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,
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when they see
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are
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working on our basic facets of life. All in all,
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controversial discussion in
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that all dimensions, aspects and facets of a
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should be
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by the
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government
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without
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any specific one as they are interlinked with
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, and prominently, effects
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participants of
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic stability
  • GDP growth
  • Employment rates
  • Living standards
  • Public services
  • Infrastructure development
  • Social progress
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Equality
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Political stability
  • Cultural development
  • Long-term well-being
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive growth
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