Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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support. Working in

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essay considered both 2 sides and, in my opinion, I prefer the statement “Study whatever they want “because there is no better

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Coherence and Cohesion

Work on organizing your essay more logically. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting points are directly related to this main idea.

Task Response

Provide a clearer introduction, stating both sides of the argument briefly before presenting your thesis statement.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure your conclusion succinctly summarizes your main points and reiterates your opinion, without introducing new ideas.

Task Achievement

Develop your paragraphs with more specific, detailed examples to support your arguments. This will enhance the relevance and impact of your essay.

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Avoid overly general statements and strive for precision in your language. Be specific about how certain decisions or trends impact individuals or society.

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Check for grammatical errors and improve your sentence structure for clarity and effectiveness.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

286 words

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Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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