Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.

Nowadays most
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students
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work
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studying time,
therefore
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of time for
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and consequence be under stress. I
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there are a lot of reasons for that,but the big
tow
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causes are
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fees of
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cost of living. First of all, when
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one
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attuned
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one
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of
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university or college
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need
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at least RO 900 as the fees for courses and other requirements
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studies
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.
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, the student has to
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around RO 7000 to get
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financial master certificate in Muscat University
instead
other fees pay
to
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IELTS which is
one
of the requirements Form of
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.
Secondly
, people have to
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a lot of daily and monthly expensive expenses
such
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electricity, water , food and rent
while
they
study
.
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RO 300 for
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department
apartment
rent not including electricity and water bill.
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, to avoid all the difficulties which face students the government should give support to
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student
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by
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in universities and colleges free and
promot
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promoting
e-learning . In
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,
the
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student can feel
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, be more
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and avoid their stress during
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give them free
study
and
promot
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promotes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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