The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps demonstrate transformations to the transport infrastructure that occurred around a city hospital from 2007 to 2010.
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, there were dramatic extensions of the parking and a bus station and roundabouts were
also
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added to facilitate access to the hospital. Starting with the picture of 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by Ring
Road
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which only connected to Hospital
Road
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in its south. There was
also
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City
Road
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that was in the far South perpendicular to Hospital
Road
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. Only one parking area existed for the staff and the public on the eastern side of Hospital
Road
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and six bus stops were located on both sides of the
road
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. Turning to the map of 2010, dynamic changes took place to increase more spaces for transportation.
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, the old parking area became exclusive to the staff and another place for vehicles was built to the east of the hospital off Ring
Road
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for public use.
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, a bus station was newly constructed across from the staff's parking area, to which two roundabouts built at both the north and south ends of Hospital
Road
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connected.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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