The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The pie chart displays the factors that lead to
land
degradation
while
the table below indicates the data
of
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land
degradation in different regions
due to
factors
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mentioned.
Overall
, it can be seen that deforestation and over-grazing are the main
reason
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why agricultural
land
declines
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, Europe had the
high
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proportion of
land
degraded in 1990.
Over- gazing
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, hit the highest point at 35%, is the biggest cause
to
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global
land
degradation.
This
data is five times as much as the other factors. Deforestation and over-cultivation
constitutes
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30% and 28%, respectively. Of the three regions, Europe had the greatest ratio of degraded
land
during the 1990s, at 23%.
However
, the biggest factor was not over-grazing but deforestation, which made up 9.8%. Oceania was the second most affected region, with
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total of 13%. A surprising factor was that over-cultivation had no effect, and
this
was mostly by over-grazing, at 11.3%.
Finally
, North America accounted for a small minority, only 5% of the
land
degraded and over-cultivation, responsible for 3.3% was the main factor.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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