'Because of advancements in transportation and communication technologies, people can now live and work anywhere they want in many different nations.' Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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technology
and transportation
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has
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advantage
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advantages
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then
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disadvantage
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Technology
made human
life
easier
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before.
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become
our
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part of
life
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now days
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we can not imagine
life
without transportation. Being used
technology
there are lots of
benefit
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daily
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the daily
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schedule. Now people can work
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as he or
she
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want. New
technology
boost
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human
life style
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lifestyle
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. we can communicate
any time
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anywhere all over
world
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the world
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being used if
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using
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technology
.it is helpful
student
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in their study or any kind of project.
on the other
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transport
make
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easier
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place to another place
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quickly. Before it had
took
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longer
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time to travel but now easier and
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safer
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Technology
as well as
transportation make
life
good and effortless. Used of them please is more
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structure
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion which are important for structuring your argument. Consider adding an opening sentence that clearly states your position on the topic, and a closing paragraph that summarizes your main points and reiterates your stance.
logical structure
Try to organize your essay into distinct paragraphs, each with a single clear idea supported by examples or reasons. This will greatly improve the readability and cohesion of your text.
content
You did briefly touch on the advantages of technology and transportation, but your response could be enriched by exploring these points in more depth and including specific, relevant examples to illustrate your points.
grammar
Be mindful of grammatical errors and sentence structure, as these can detract from the clarity of your message. Consider revisiting basic grammar rules and practicing sentence construction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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