Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there fewer languages in the world. To extant do you agree or disagree?

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is generally acknowledge
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that some
languages
vanish every year. Concerning
this
issue, some
people
are of the opinion that
this
phenomenon makes our lives more convenient. I only partly endorse
this
view as I demonstrate there are some alternative ways. Undoubtedly, there are some noteworthy reasons why some
people
think that disappearing
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tongues in society will
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our lives easier. One of the representative reasons is that
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of communication increases.
For example
, whenever we travel small sized country, we have to learn their language to talk with native
people
However
, if only a few lingua
franca
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francas
such
as English and Spanish we can talk
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other and read their
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easily.
Moreover
, not only
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industry but
also
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effect on overseas business. Because, nowadays, most countries increasing overseas business, so
people
who can have conversations without translators are required.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
who disagree with
this
view mentioned above. The most reasonable one is that we can not protect our history.
For instance
, if some tribe with
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is invaded by other
people
, we lose that tribe's history and culture and
then
, we will not find out anything about them.
Furthermore
, if some
languages
disappear,
people
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vanished
languages
have to learn new
language
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languages
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and teach
their
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next generation.
Last
but not least, some
people
lose their jobs
such
as
linguistis
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linguistics
linguists
linguistic
and translators. In a nutshell,
although
there are some valid arguments that the dying out of various
languages
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tourism industry, I believe the
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languages
should be preserved.
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task response
Ensure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. Your stance was somewhat unclear, which could confuse readers.
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Try to develop your arguments with more detailed and specific examples. The examples provided are somewhat general and could be more illustrative.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of ideas between paragraphs. Use transitional phrases and topic sentences to guide the reader more smoothly from one idea to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread your essay to correct minor grammatical errors and improve word choice. This will make your argument more persuasive and easier to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Consider including a conclusion that summarizes your main points and clearly restates your position. This strengthens the overall coherence of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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