The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
In
this
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chart
charts
we can observe the changes Add a comma
charts,
percentage
of ownership of electrical devices
, in addition
to number
of Change the article
a number
the number
hours
of house work
per Correct your spelling
housework
household
per week.
There are three devices
are
in Unnecessary verb
apply
percentage
of ownership per household
which are, refrigerators, vaccum
cleaners and Correct your spelling
vacuum
also
washing machines. In 1920 almost zero percent
of houses owned refrigerators Change the spelling
per cent
while
vaccum
cleaners and washing machines were at thirty and forty Correct your spelling
vacuum
percent
. Refrigerators with the biggest Change the spelling
per cent
percentage
incline was
the first electrical device out of these three Change the verb form
were
devices
which reached one hundred percent
Change the spelling
per cent
at
1980. The next electrical device to be Change preposition
in
at
all houses, was almost 20 years later Change preposition
in
at
2000. Washing machines Change preposition
in
with
Change preposition
apply
in contrast
to the highest percentage
in 1920,
had not reached 100 Remove the comma
apply
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
yet
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apply
untill
2019 and is around 70 Correct your spelling
until
percent
in 2019.
Despite the Change the spelling
per cent
increase
Replace the word
increased
number
of electrical devices
in previous
chart, the Change the article
the previous
number
of hours
of chores in each house hold
had been reclining since 1920. The highest Correct your spelling
household
hours
Correct quantifier usage
number of hours
were
put Unnecessary verb
apply
to
housework was at 1920 with 50 Change preposition
into
hours
per household
and the lowest number
of hours
put to
housework were 10 Change preposition
into
hours
.
With the increasing number
of electrical devices
in each household
to more than 70 percent
the hours
of housework had been lowered to 10 hours
per week per household
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