The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The pie chart illustrates the results of a survey in one African state about the main reasons for using smartphones for pupils from 2016 to 2019.
Overall
, it clearly can be seen that there were two main reasons for using gadgets in one
Africa
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state.
Moreover
, digital cameras and phone calls did not contribute as much to the other activities. In
the
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terms of the main reason for using smartphones, the percentage of social media stood at 50% in 2016, and went
downby
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down by
down
2% in 2017, and in the next two years in 2019
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increased until the
last
year at 56%.
However
, in 2016 emails made up 20% and were relatively stable until 2018, before going down around 1% in 2019. Regarding
to
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the other reasons, in 2016 digital cameras accounted for 18%, and in the next two
years
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they went down to 3% and increased one-fifth in the final year.
Moreover
, phone calls make up 10% in the first year, and go up in 2017 and 2018 to 11%. But, in 2019 hitting a trough of 5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noticeable shift
  • communication preferences
  • considerably declined
  • functionalities
  • reflecting global trends
  • emerging trend
  • educational use of technology
  • diversification
  • traditional communication
  • digital forms of communication
  • instant messaging
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