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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought over the world. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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In recent times, there has been an increase in
people
 purchasing
food
 at restaurants but being unable to finish it, resulting in
food
wastage
.
This
 is mainly
due to
huge
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the huge
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appitite
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appetite
 to eat but they cannot complete the whole portion that they ordered.
This
 issue can be resolved by educating
people
 about the
wastage
. One of the significant
problem
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problems
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 with
food
 hotels is
wastage
. Generally, in many
places
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places,
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people
orders
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order
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 more than three items
in
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on
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 the menu.
Although
, they cannot finish all the dishes that they
orderd
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ordered
but
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people
 want to
experinces
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experience
 the taste of the dish.
Moreover
, the
left overs
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leftovers
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 cannot be taken home because they spoil quickly.
Therefore
,
people
 throw
the
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away the
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 remaining
food
,
causes
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causing
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food
wastage
.
For example
, recent studies in India
shows
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show
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 that 60% of
the
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apply
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food
wastage
 is
due to
the
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apply
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people
 ordering more
number of
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apply
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items than their hunger. One of the possible
solution
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solutions
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 for
this
 issue
to
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is to
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 give
awarness
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awareness
 to the public. There are plenty
problems
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of problems
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 associated with
soplied
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spoiled
supplied
food
this
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apply
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such
 as pollution,
increase
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an increase
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 in
insets
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insects
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 and
deseases
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diseases
.
However
, many individuals are not aware of these problems. In every
food
place
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place,
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 there should be an
advertisment
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advertisement
of
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for
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 these problems. Government should allocate funds and run social
campaines
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campaigns
.
For example
, In
India
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India,
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 one restaurant charges more if the customer
leave
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leaves
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 any
food
 item that they order.
To conclude
, customers play an important role in wasting
food
 by ordering more,
however
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however,
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this
 can be taken care
by
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of by
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 providing valuable education to the
people
for
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about
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this
 problem.
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Introduction clarity
A clearer introduction setting out the topic and your approach to answering the essay question is needed. Ensure to introduce what you will discuss.
Conclusion clarity
Include a conclusion that summarises your main points and restates your position in light of the essay content.
Addressing the question
Make sure to directly address the questions asked in the essay prompt. Both reasons for food wastage and proposed solutions should be clearly identified and discussed.
Paragraph organization
Use paragraphing to organize your essay. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and follow logically from one to the next.
Use of examples
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments, ensuring they are relevant and clearly explained.
Grammar and spelling
Check for spelling and grammatical errors to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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