IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries
#tables #information #sales #fairtrade- #coffee #bananas #five #european #countries
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The tables featured above compare changes in
sales
Use synonyms
 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in five countries in Europe from 1999 to 2004.
Overall
Linking Words
, all five countries experienced a growth in the
sales
Use synonyms
 of coffee.
Besides
Linking Words
, banana
sales
Use synonyms
 saw a rise in all, except
Sweden
Use synonyms
 and Denmark. With regard to the first graph,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the
sales
Use synonyms
 of coffee in Switzerland were twice as high as that in the UK, which stood at 3 and 1.5 million
euros
Use synonyms
, respectively.
While
Linking Words
sales
Use synonyms
 in the former doubled in 2004, those in the latter rose significantly to 20 million (20m). The figures for Denmark, Belgium, and
Sweden
Use synonyms
 were altogether responsible for more than 3m
euros
Use synonyms
,
whereas
Linking Words
 the first two reached a high of nearly 2m
euros
Use synonyms
, the
sales
Use synonyms
 in
Sweden
Use synonyms
 remained relatively stable. Shifting the focus to the second one, it is apparent that there was a considerable increase in the
sales
Use synonyms
 of bananas in Switzerland, which rose approximately threefold from 15m
euros
Use synonyms
 to 47m. The
sales
Use synonyms
 in Denmark were
initially
Linking Words
 twice as high as that in the UK, at 2m and 1m, respectively. The former almost halved to reach 0.9m,
however
Linking Words
, the figure for the latter increased over fivefold to reach 5.5m. When it comes to Belgium and
Sweden
Use synonyms
, the
sales
Use synonyms
 in the second country were originally three times as high as that in the first one. The former experienced a high increase of 3.4m,
in contrast
Linking Words
, there was a slight drop in the latter to reach 1m in 2004.
Submitted by writingbhos on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, sweden, euros, m with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: