The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2005.
The line graph illustrates the figure of
people
who visited the museum in various seasons in UK
In 2005. Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, the rate of people
who went to the building in the summer is more than winter
. Change preposition
in winter
Farthermore
, most Correct your spelling
Furthermore
people
visited the place at 12 pm
.
In the summer, it can
apparent that the percentage of Verb problem
is
people
who visited the museum upward dramatically to reach approximately 1300 person
at 11 am. Fix the agreement mistake
people
Then
it rised
continually to arrive Correct your spelling
raised
rose
rises
the
highest peak around 1500 Change preposition
at the
person
at 12 Fix the agreement mistake
people
pm
. After it started downward gradually to arrive the
lowest point which is no visitor went to the place at 18 Change preposition
at the
pm
.
In the winter, it can noted that the rate of individual
who went to the building fluctuated from 1am to 12 Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
pm
and it arrived its
peak Change preposition
at its
600
Change preposition
of 600
tourist
. Change to a plural noun
tourists
Then
it fall
down significantly to the lowest point which is no more Wrong verb form
fell
people
visited
the place and it continued from 15-18 Wrong verb form
visiting
pm
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