Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by government. others believe those who financed the construction of a building should be free to design it as they fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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task achievement
Ensure your essay fully responds to all parts of the task. You should discuss both views and provide your opinion with clear reasons and examples.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas logically. Begin with an introduction, followed by paragraphs that each focus on a separate main idea, and conclude your essay summarizing your views.
task achievement
To improve your score, make sure to develop your ideas more fully. Use specific examples to support your viewpoints. This helps make your argument clearer and more persuasive.
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Pay attention to spelling, vocabulary, and grammatical structures. Using a variety of complex structures accurately can significantly improve the quality of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Architectural heritage
  • Urban harmony
  • Government-controlled
  • Safety standards
  • Accessibility
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Investors
  • Developers
  • Innovate
  • Modern trends
  • Vibrant cityscapes
  • Iconic buildings
  • Economic opportunities
  • Balanced approach
  • Guidelines
  • Architectural innovation
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