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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries
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The table illustrates the information of
sales
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 proportion in two various edible products
such
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 as Fairtrade coffee and
bananas
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 in different five European nations in 1999 and 2004. Units are measured by millions of euros.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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bananas
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'
sales
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 proportions were the highest than coffee. In detail, in terms of coffee, in 1999, Switzerland had the highest
sales
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 and it doubled in 2004, at £3 and 6
million
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. Denmark was placed second place on
sales
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 in 1999 and it increased slightly, which was 1.8 and 2
million
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.
Similarly
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, the UK had only 1.5 in 1999
then
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 it grew significantly by 20
million
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.
Likewise
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, Belgium and Sweden
also
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 rose than the previous period of
sales
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, from 1 to 1.7
million
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 and 0.8 to 1 respectively.
Furthermore
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, in terms of
bananas
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, Switzerland had the highest
sales
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 in the given periods, it increased drastically from 15
million
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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 in 2004. In the same manner, the UK and Belgium had grown than
the
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in the
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 previous period, from 1 to 5.5
million
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 and 0.6 to 4
million
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, Sweden and Denmark decreased the
sales
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 of
bananas
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 in the previous period, it fell from 1.8 to 1 and 2 to 0.9 respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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