The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much
These pie charts illustrate how much a person consumes three types of nutrients
sodium
, saturated fats and added sugars in every meal on each day in the country United States of America.The data is in percentage.
Overall
,it is noticeable that each person used to have more
sodium
and saturated fats in
dinner
and
however
,the
sugar
consumption is high during the intake of
snacks
. Starting with
sodium
,most individuals have
this
particular nutrient at
dinner
which contains 43% of their total meals.Breakfast and
snacks
contain only 14% of the total
soidum
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sodium
consumption and 29% of lunch
consist
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consists
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of
sodium
.Moving on to
the
Correct article usage
apply
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saturated fat,
this
kind of
nutrients
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nutrient
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found
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mostly in
dinner
with
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at
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37% and lunch
to be
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the second level with 26% and 21% of the fat
have been
Wrong verb form
was
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taken during the intake of
snacks
and 16% in
the
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apply
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breakfast.
On the other hand
, added
sugar
is mostly consumed as
snacks
with
the
Correct article usage
a
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higher percentage of 42% and
dinner
has 23% of added
sugar
,
although
, breakfast has the least amount of
sugar
with 16% for starting a day.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner, sugar, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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