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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The
digrame
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diagram
 illustrates the way in how the ground floor on a particular building
betwen
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between
 three different times.
overall
,
it is clear that
 there are
a
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huge differences are happened during the
period
 from 1958 until the present time.
To begin
, the building was designed as an
office
at
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in
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 the first
period
 with
an
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a
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 reception area on the right side of the entrance and a toilet on the the side.
Also
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 it
contane
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contains
contain
 a
manger
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manager
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office
 next to the kitchen which is on the right corner and there is a
meating
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meeting
 room on the other corner and next to it there
an
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assistans
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assistant
assistance
office
.
That
is
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changed after
to
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decades at the
seconed
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second
period
, so it
is
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was
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 designed as an apartment with a kitchen and two bedrooms.
also
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 it had one living room at the left corner and
finally
 on
bathrom
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bathroom
 and a shower next to
entrance
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the entrance
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.And
taht
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that
also
 was changed
at
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in
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 the
last
period
 which
is
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started
fron
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from
 2001 until now to a flower shop. It had an
office
 ,
and
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apply
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a kitchen,
a
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gift cards,
play
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a play
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 area and
flower
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a flower
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that your essay comprehensively responds to the prompt. Expand on each time period with more detail and avoid stating mere descriptions without analysis or comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance clarity and comprehension of your ideas, structure your writing into clear, distinct paragraphs for each time period, beginning with an introductory sentence that outlines the changes during that period.
Coherence and Cohesion
Including an introduction and a conclusion is critical. Start by paraphrasing the question, provide an overview of the main changes, and conclude by summarizing your observations.
Task Achievement
Support your points with specific examples and comparisons between time periods. This involves not just listing what is present but also explaining the significance of these changes and how they compare to the previous state.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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