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Writing Samples
Band 4

The best way to reduce emissions from vehicles is to impose a higer tax on vehicles which use a lot of fuel and lower tax on those that don't. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#emissions #vehicles #higer #tax #fuel
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Nowadays, because of
the
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global warming, the emission of
vehicles
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becomes
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 a serious problem for every
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 all over the world, some
people
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 think it is the best
way
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 to make those who drive traditional
vehicles
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to
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pay more
tax
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 than those who drive
elecronic
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electric
electronic
cars
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. To be honest, I share a different opinion. I regard we have to admit that,
vehicles
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 which use
fuel
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 did
influnced
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influenced
influence
 our
evirnoment
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environment
 a lot, and it is a good
way
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 to impose
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tax
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a tax
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 on those drivers. The action of
add
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tax
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maybe can
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 reduce some
emission
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emissions
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 from those
vehicles
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, but I have to say the effect will be limited. For one thing,if the
tax
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 policy was acted, it
will
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 lower the life quality of
working class
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working-class
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people
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while
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 the rich
people
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 won't feel much difference. The users of
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fuel powered
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fuel-powered
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vehicles
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 a lot are usually
whealthy
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wealthy
healthy
people
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, especially those who
drives
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cars
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 like
landrovers
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land rovers
landrover
 and fancy race
cars
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, these
cars
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bruns
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burn
way
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 more
fuel
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 per
meils
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meals
 than ordinary
cars
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.
For working
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 class
people
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, they won't need a
tax
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 to make them change their old
car
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cars
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 to
elechronic
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electronic
cars
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. So
that
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,
tax
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 on
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fuel powered
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vehicles
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 might not be very useful. One thing for another, if
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government
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the government
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dose
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does
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imposed
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 the
tax
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, the question to be asked is what will
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government
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the government
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 do with the income
.
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Government
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The government
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 held elections every 4 or 5 years in most of
countries
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the countries
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. It usually takes years to pass the law about the
tax
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, and
tax
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 on every
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fuel powered
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 car driver for 1 or 2 years,
then
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 they hold a
relection
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selection
reflection
, new
government
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 maybe
the
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axe the
tax
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, because the citizens elect them for that. After all
these
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,
those
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tax
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 money will be used on other things. In conclusion, to reduce the
traditional
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number of traditional
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vehicles
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vehicle
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 users the best
way
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 is not to add
tax
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 on them. There are many other ways like developing new
cars
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use
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using
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 electricity and
let
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letting
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people
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 know about our environment via news or education.
Pleople
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People
 will
atomaticaly
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automatically
 change their car if new
elechronic
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electronic
cars
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 are more
advance
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advanced
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 and more
econimical
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economical
economically
 friendly to them.
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