Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyles in the countryside. other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Countries involve
of
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apply

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several
government
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governments

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.The government
including
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includes

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cities
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and
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this
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these

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cities
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contains
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contain

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of
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apply

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many villages. Most
of
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apply

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the
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apply

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people
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argue that living in
cities
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more
healthy
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healthier

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than living in the villages.In my opinion living in
countryside
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the countryside

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is more beneficial than
ther
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their

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place. First of all, in the past,
people
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living were more fresh water and green
grave
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graves

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.
There
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They

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are looking at
availability
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the availability

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of water and fresh food for themselves and their animals when they
are
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apply

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decid
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decide

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to
built
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build

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home
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a home

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or when
leave
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leaving

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one place to
other
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another

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for
living
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a living

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.More
ver
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over

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, most of them do not think about infrastructure because
of
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apply

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it was not
availability
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available at

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that
times
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time

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and
also
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, they
do
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are

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not
interesting
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interested

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to
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in

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education and entertainment ,they
just
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are just

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happy
from
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with

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small things,
such
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as,
play
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playing

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football with their peers in their village .
For example
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, Bedouin
people
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always travel from
place
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one place

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to
other
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another

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only because of reacher for water and food .
Secondly
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, today
youner
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the young

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generation looking for
ward
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a ward

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to big
cities
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where every things available.
in addition
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,They
are
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apply

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always think about their job and
future
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the future

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of their children when they decide to
built
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build

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home
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a home

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should
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that should

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be near their job , school , hospital, mall and good entertainment .
For instance
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,
omani
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Omani

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youner
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younger

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built their houses in Muscat. In Muscat region every things available
such
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as
,
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apply

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jobs, a lot of good
privat
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private

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and government
school
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schools

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hospital
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hospitals

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provid
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provided

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by good
high quality
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high-quality

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technology , parks,
several
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and several

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mall
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malls

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spread
in
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throughout

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All
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The

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area . In
conclued
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conclusion

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,there are a lot of
people
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prefer
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who prefer

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living in
cities
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. In my opinion , I still strongly believe that living in your village
more
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is more

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healthy in the sense of relaxation and good health,
were
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where

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be
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you are

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near
of
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apply

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your family and
you
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your

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relative
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relatives

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Introduction and Conclusion
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should clearly present the topic and your viewpoint. Concluding statements should succinctly summarize your arguments.
Logical Structure
Aim for a coherent structure by organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea, supported by relevant examples or explanations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs. This aids in the flow of your essay and enhances reader comprehension. Examples include: 'Firstly', 'In addition', 'For instance', and 'However'.
Address Task Requirements
Address the task directly by discussing both views mentioned in the prompt before providing your own opinion. Make sure your opinion is clear and consistent throughout the essay.
Use of Examples
Enrich your essay with specific examples to support your points. Specific examples add credibility and depth to your arguments. They help illustrate your points more vividly.
Grammar and Sentence Structure
Revise for grammatical accuracy and varied sentence structures to improve readability and sophistication of your essay. Frequent errors can distract and confuse the reader.
Idea Development
Focus on developing clear, comprehensive ideas. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence, followed by explanations and examples. Avoid overly broad statements without support.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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