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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punsihment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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people get their behavior when they are
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their
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 early age. Teaching
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children
 the difference between
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right and wrong can lead to good
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 when they grow up.
According to
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childern
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children
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and
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 how they have been
teached
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 tends to have
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dramatically
 results in their
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.
Children
 will pick up
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behaviours
 when they see someone doing them. By picking up, they don't know
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 that
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 are right or wrong.
Therefore
, parents should start teaching them at they early age,
while
 they start
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learning
 and
develope
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developing
 their
behaivor
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behaviour
. Non-violent punishments can be sometimes used when parents or teachers find the
children
 doing bad
behaviors
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.
However
, it is not the best way to show
children
to
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why they shouldn't do that. Starting with talking and explaining are the better methods to
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children
 what is right and wrong
behaviors
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. Parents or teachers can
somstimes
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sometimes
 use non-violent punishments
such
 as
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banning
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 their
children
 from using
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iPads
 before they finish their
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homework
, or
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 deserts if their
children
 don't have the main meal. In conclusion, adults should teach their
children
 when they
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 young.
This
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avoid
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 their
children
to pick
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 up bad
behaviors
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.
However
, they should teach them with non-violent
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 and avoid using punishments.
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structure
Ensure your introduction clearly presents your stance on the topic and briefly outlines the points you'll discuss. Your conclusion should summarise these points and restate your opinion firmly.
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content
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