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The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017. The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017.

The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017. The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017.
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The given table illustrates the enrollment of different
students
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 in Manchester University, from
1937to
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1937 to
 2017.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the highest number of
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 that had been enrolled was in 2017.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1937 there were 327 new
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 in the university, just above half of that
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 were males, and 45% were females.
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, the
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 of
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 who came from within 40 miles of Manchester were the same
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 of males.
In addition
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,
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 who came to study abroad were a really small
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 just 6%, and it was from 4 countries.In 2017, there was a similarity in the numbers.As the
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percentage
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 of
the
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students
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 who came to study
were
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 the same just the
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were
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 the opposite.
Whereas
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,
students
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 who were close to Manchester were only 1-2%.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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