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The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017. The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017.

The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017. The table gives information about enrollment of students in Manchester University in 1937, 1963 and 2017.
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The given table illustrates the enrollment of different
students
 in Manchester University, from
1937to
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1937 to
 2017.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that the highest number of
student
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students
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 that had been enrolled was in 2017.
According to
 what is shown, in 1937 there were 327 new
students
 in the university, just above half of that
percentage
 were males, and 45% were females.
However
, the
percentage
 of
student
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students
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 who came from within 40 miles of Manchester were the same
percentage
 of males.
In addition
,
students
 who came to study abroad were a really small
percentage
 just 6%, and it was from 4 countries.In 2017, there was a similarity in the numbers.As the
the
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percentage
 of
the
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students
 who came to study
were
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 the same just the
percentage
were
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 the opposite.
Whereas
,
students
 who were close to Manchester were only 1-2%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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