‘Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.’ To what extent do you agree with this idea?

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letter is being
expressed
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my interest in
this
opportunity.
I
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highly motivated to
work
at
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.
one
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as I am quite familiar with the subject, keen
of
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innovation, and definitely support the idea, that
energy
can be transformed into money.
In addition
, I love to create, implement and develop IT products and I’m really good
in
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at
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it. The first reason why I
close
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to the topic
about
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of
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energy
is that I have
technical
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a technical
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education. The second reason is about
work
experience. I have done some scientific
works
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related to
the
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energy
, which included creating
an IT systems
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an IT system
IT systems
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. The first one was about saving money for
energy
sources
due to
technological process optimization based on computing
modeling
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. The next was “
Energy
saving: scientific, technical and economic aspects of ensuring
energy
security.
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justification for the feasibility of introducing cogeneration plants and
energy
-saving water treatment technologies at food industry enterprises”. I
also
lead, working as a creator of the concept and ideology as well, the research project “
Energy
and Economic Passports of Railways”, related to the development of a new system for accounting for the costs of fuel and
energy
resources of railways, ensuring their transparency and controllability.
I
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passionate about delivering fast and reliable systems and services designed to suit the needs of our customers and consumers.
Last
years
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year
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I managed
the
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a
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team of developers, analysts, designers, and DevOps
engineer
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engineers
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and worked as a
Product
Lead and
Product
Owner. I worked as a Solution Architect in
the
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big company starting
her
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its
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digital transformation. As I can see, I can bring
a
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great value to the company and I
full
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am full
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of enthusiasm to do
this
.
Due to
my familiarity with business and system
analyzing
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, ability to
make
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quick
researches
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, broad range mindset, and earned value management, I can easily create the best roadmap for the
product
, formulate the right requirements and show the benefits from implementation. (I presented my ideas and experience about requirements management at the PMI Business Analysis Conference, I was the only one from Europe as a speaker there and I have got
a
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great feedback). I’ve released many products,
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and WebApps
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as well,
some
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and some
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of them are still working and developing.
Additionally
, I have a good taste in design. Before I created the task for the designer, I created the user stories and simple landing. I am perfect at managing people and processes. I managed big projects, which were
implementing
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on the big territory in the different time zones, by some teams and subcontractors.
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on
project
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the project
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, I use different methodologies,
such
as Waterfall, Agile (Scrum, Kanban mostly), or combine them. Apart from team engagement and inspiration, I focus on our priorities to make sure that we meet our objectives on time and
budget
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within budget
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.
Besides
, I am good at
work
estimation
,
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and
evaluate
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evaluating
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team progress with different metrics.
Moreover
, I use metrics and
product
analysis to improve the
product
. I always
work
for the financial result. I am intelligent, creative, positive, flexible, curious, and active. I love reading, hiking, watching movies, and travelling. I would love to meet for an interview and discuss my contribution to your company. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
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To improve your essay, first, ensure that you provide a clear and relevant introduction that directly addresses the topic and outlines the main points of your essay. Avoid jumping straight into details without setting the context.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your essay flows logically from one point to the next, using connectors and transitions to guide the reader through your arguments. This includes having a clear progression of ideas, from introduction to conclusion.
task response
Support your main points with specific examples and detailed explanations. While you provided examples from your experience, ensure that each example directly supports your argument, with a clear link to the topic in question.
coherence and cohesion
Include a concise conclusion that summarizes your stance on the topic and reiterates the main points discussed, offering a final reflection or call to action.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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