The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagram illustrates the entire development from apple production to canning. It is a manual, industrial step involving 14 stages, from picking the
apples
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in the orchard to the delivery process.
To begin
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with, the
apples
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are collected by people with their hands,
then
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those
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they
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are transported to the factory, where they are washed and cleaned to eliminate dirt and improve their quality.
After
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this
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apples
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are stored in a special cold system to be preserved.
Consequently
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, they are put on a scale weighed and they are classified
according to
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size. After that, they go through the peeling area and
then
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they are corning and slicing.
In addition
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, the
apples
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are canning and sealing where they go directly to the cooking and sterilization area. After they get cold it is necessary to label the product. To finish the canned process the product is stored until it has to be delivered.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words apples with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • canning process
  • systematic nature
  • ripe apples
  • preservatives
  • sterilization
  • distribution
  • technology-intensive
  • longevity
  • quality control
  • packaging
  • hygiene standards
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