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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Compared in the two pictures
is
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show
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 the layout of the central
library
20
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from 20
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 years ago
with
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to
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 the one at present.
It is clear that
 some changes
occured
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occurred
 to the public
library
 over the 20-year period, mainly by adding a catering area and some facilities.
However
, the
library
 still
have
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has
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 four separate areas and one central hall. We can see that in the east-southern corner, a coffee space was installed, replacing
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk that was moved forward. There are
also
 self-service machines that are used to deal with
tickets
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ticket
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 purchases and book returns. The new facilities include two sets of tables and chairs in the central hall,
as well as
 two
sofars
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sofas
stars
 in
children's
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the children's
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 fiction
books
 area. Apart from the installation of some
fourniture
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furniture
 in
children's
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the children's
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books
 area, we can notice other changes in the same space.
For example
, storytelling events are frequently organized by the public
library
. Meanwhile, some areas of the public
library
 disappeared. The one of
adults
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adult
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 non-fiction
books
was
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were
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 removed,
while
 a new space dedicated to all reference
books
 emerged.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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