The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
The line graph illustrates
population
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the population
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growth
of three particular countries in the
U.S
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U.S.
state of Oregon over a period of time from 1940 to 2000.
Overall
, the
number of
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apply
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population
on
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of
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Columbia, Yamhill, and Washington
are
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increased between 1940 and 2000. Starting with the steady
growth
from 1940 to 1970, the number of
population
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the population
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have
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largest
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the largest
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increase between 1970 and 2000, soaring dramatically to its peak. Columbia and Yamhill
have
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a similar
number of
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population
throughout the entire
time-frame
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time frame
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, both countries
have
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around 30,000 people in 1940. 
This
figure witnessed a steady
growth
to reach approximately 50% increase in
population
in 1970, before experiencing its largest
growth
of around 100% between 1970 and 2000.
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, Washington
was having
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growth
for
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of
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about 60% and 110% from 1940 to 1970 and from 1970 to 2000, respectively. Washington
exceeds
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exceeded
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around 45,000 people from Columbia and Yamhill in 1940. As the
population
growth
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grew
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from 1940 to 2000, the gap rose significantly to about 150,000 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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